Reddit reviews The Scene Book: A Primer for the Fiction Writer
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Just reading your description of how you write,
"This happens, and now this happens, and now this happens..."
Write with more life, write with action.
Don't settle for, "Like a mad man he jumped into the car. Then he sped off. As he was driving he skidded across some black ice."
Change it up, we know that whatever you are writing comes after what you just said, you don't need to tell us that. Only most of us are morons, not all of us.
Just say what you want to say. Use action verbs and words. We can fill in the rest.
When I re-read what you wrote, I see that you also want to have some highs and lows alternating between sentences or groups of sentences. Like bobross1313 says, get the words on the page first, then after you've got your 50,000, re-read it and then add in the zest where you want it. I couldn't tell you who said it, probably a bunch of different people, but you are going to have to go through your writing at least once more after you've written it. NaNoWriMo is only about quantity, not quality.
Not only that, but after you've written 50,000 words, you're a little better of a writer so when you go back to re-read it won't seem nearly as good as when you first wrote it because you are a better writer. The same thing will happen the next time you go through it because you will get better each time. The only way to get better is to write more and read more and then write some more.
You can do it.
It's all about action.
You might want to check out this book too, "The Scene Book".
http://www.amazon.com/exec/obidos/tg/detail/-/0143038265/
It may help you to structure your scenes a little better and understand how a scene is set up.
I wouldn't have passed this. Your writing is incredibly flowery, your description is overwrought while managing to convey absolutely nothing, you adverb and adjective all over the place...
Sorry to be harsh, but you need to pick up some books on the absolute basics of fiction writing. I recommend:
http://www.amazon.com/Scene-Book-Primer-Fiction-Writer/dp/0143038265/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1291362532&sr=8-1
http://www.amazon.com/Writing-10th-Anniversary-Memoir-Craft/dp/1439156816/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1291362561&sr=1-1
http://www.amazon.com/Elements-Style-4th-William-Strunk/dp/0205313426/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1291362620&sr=8-1